I like it, you're pretty good at conveying the emotion in the lines, which is a really important thing a lot of people forget about. Still room to improve on that though, sometimes it sounds like you got a little lost in the lines, but definitely good work.
Your voice itself is actually quite good, smooth and clear, went well with the story. Complimenting someone's natural voice is a pretty awkward experience, but I'll just go ahead and say yours was nice to listen to.
My biggest complaint is that honestly, it's too quiet. I'm not saying you need to talk louder, but perhaps use the Amplify feature to boost the volume or something. I'm no professional so that could be horrible advice, but that's the way I'd do it. I had to crank the volume to max and adorn my headphones just to hear you.
Also your mic has some static noise associated with it, of course I'm not gonna say to buck up and go buy a proper mic, but perhaps you should also toy with the Noise Removal feature to remove some of it.
Nice stuff though, it was definitely worth uploading!